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another poem......
hey im the one who wrote the poem about the girl who ran away, heres another one:
Your eyes are the color of the sky,after days of rain, hollow and empty, just to cover up the pain.
I want to scream and I want to know, what terrible thing has made you so.....
You hide inside as you let your body take the blame, youre to weak to handle all the shame.
Maybe all could be better , all of this could be through, if youd take the time to listen when I say that I love you.
how was it?
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OMG! i think its really good if all ur other poems are this good maybe u should publish them my sis rites and publishes hers for free over the net at a plce call poetrybox.com
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It was great. I'm glad you have a poetic side in your heart. It gives people a way to say words without really saying them. Poems come from the heart, just like yours did! Thanx much!
~Chelsea~
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Wow! now this, this is good. You have talent and I'm not sure if I remember your other poem but you abviosly have talent, keep up the good work.
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kat
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:) Awesome. Keep it up
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hey that is a great poem. and i think that u have a real talent for writing. i would love to hear more!
~katie~
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Hey!! WOW! That is a GREAT poem! I really like it. Good job!! Keep writting more because I'll sure read them. You seem like a caring person and I can tell a lot by just the way you write. Keep it up!! You can leave some in my inbox if you ever want me to read them! =D
xoxo Kourtney
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Awesome!!!!! Keep It UP!!! <3
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GOOD!!!!! i really liked it
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Its not to bad, but again, you could work on your structre a little and maybe expand parts, like the middle two lines. I love the imagery of the first line:
'Your eyes are the color of the sky after rain;
hollow and empty,
just to cover up the pain.'
Kepp working on your poems :)
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wow thats a really good poem.
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its great...ur talented...where do u base ur storys from? like where do u get all this ideas...like bout da gurl dat run away n now another one (or may be da same one) who cant handel all da shame?!?! do u get this ideas from any of ur friends...or u describe ur self? either way...they are very nice...n u have a gift putin ur feelings (or imagination) in to words :) keep it up xoxo effy
P.S. if u dont mind n u wanna answer my questions IM me in aol...xxhotsexycutiexx or XRoMaNsPrInCesSX if u dont have aol or aim then holla at msn....capkenja_1@hotmail.com
THANKS!
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poetry is like a piece of art. there's no one that can tell exactly how to do it, and what to write/draw about.
it was beautiful... poetry rocks and is really fun to write.
keep writing stuff! you have a good poets potential!
~accolade~
:)rate me please!
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THAT WAS GOOD YOUR REALLY GREAT AT POETRY
Love Ashley , plz rate me
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