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Emotions
Emotions
I feel as if i'm outside myself watching life. It feels so stange, like a cat in new land.
YOu think I have no emotion, then you don't know me. If you could understand me, just listen you can hear my thoughts. The volume is always hight never quiet.
my smile is automatic, like a machine programed.
I want to tell you more, I want you to understand.
I don't know who I am. Too many voices. too many emotions.
I feel so lost! No one understands. I'm so insecure just waiting for your secure.
I reach out, I yell but my arms don't move not a sound escapes my mouth.
I'm so alone, So many voices, so many emotions....
Copyright ©2004 Kathleen Janette Bare
Is this a good poem? Let me know. I just wrote it.
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Well i hope this isnt how you feel that would be sorta bad but the poem is good-trix
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I don't know why this question was rated high by the moderators. First off, you're not looking for any kind of advice whatsoever. Second off, it's illegal to say something is copyrighted if it is not.
Third, it's a fair poem, I just find the topic really cliche.
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It's pretty damn good! It does need some editing, though. "I feel so lost!" just doesn't seem to fit. Also, I think you need to go over this and fix some of the grammar. It's poetry, so you can get away with incorrect grammar (artistic licence!) but you don't want to put in any nasty grammatical mistakes that you don't know about.
Put it on fictionpress.com or submit it to one of the contests on poetry.com.
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your poem iz awsome i was really into it i am aslo a poet if you want to enter your poetry onlie and try to win some money for it and get it published in a book then go to this site
www.poems.com and just look around and then type in your form and submit it
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I thynk it's okay. I thynk yew could use more descriptions tho! It also seemz as if ur trying a little too hard to be deep lyke those poems that make you think or feel srry for yew. I'm just bein' honest.
aLi
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I really like it!! You're very very talented! Keep writing poems...it's one of those talents I wish I had! You did a really good job!! =) Love ya! -Mandee
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awsome poem!! totally into it...
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its a very nice poem...keep it up..xoxo effy
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Ya its awesume!Keep up the good work!
*BrittBritt
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