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Depression poems I wrote
Hi instead of self harming myself I've been writing poetry :) would you mind reading some if my work and giving me feedback? I have a lot but here are my three favorite ones :)
This one is called " useless lies "
Today is the day
That I'll give up on trying
Today is the end
Of all the useless lying
Not wasting my tears
If they won't stop the bleeding
Today is the day that my heart will stop beating
My palms are sweaty my vision is blurred
I let out a scream that no one even heard
I blink back the tears I choke back a cry
Today is the end if all the useless lies
"Call me crazy"
some people call me crazy
Some think I'm just sic
I think I'm just lazy
I need something short and quick
Something simple to take away my pain
Something easy to help me live through the day
As my world gets destroyed I'm destroying
myself
Fill the ache in my heart
That can't be filled by anything else
I'm done with crying
My blood is my tears
It's time to let go
Time to face my fears
Some think I'm crazy
Some think I'm sick
I think I'm just lazy
I need something short and quick
" forgotten "
Left alone
Forgotten
Nobody else cares
Left alone forgotten
No one else is there
I can't escape to scared to try
I still feel alone inside
My world crashing
All around me
Raining sorrow
Someone see me
See me for who I am inside
No one cares
No one even tries
Done believing
All your lies
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Wow, it's great you found a constructive outlet for your depression. Those are actually really good poems- there are a few lines in them that are seriously great. Keep it up- its so impressive that you turned to this rather than self-harm, what a creative and smart individual you are! Keep it up and good luck with everything :)
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i love that not only you came on here to show your poetry which by the way is amazing but you were straight up that this helped you feel better, hopefully others who feel this way will see. and you should sign up for allpoetry. it's a great sight for writers like yourself. you can meet and read other writers AND even get feedback.
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Very talented beautiful poems :) I write poems sometimes when I'm depressed to it sets me free in a way
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You are seriously very talented! Your poems gave me chills.
In "Useless Lies" I love the line, "I let out a scream that no one even heard"
In "Call me Crazy" I like the line, "my blood is my tears"
And in the last poem, I like how you said "raining sorrow". Your poetry is beautiful and interesting. I also like how you repeat some lines...like in the first poem, you said "today is...", but at the end, you attached a conclusion to that phrase.
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These poems are good, Reading them describes someone who is angry.
Writing is the best medicine for depression, I have suffered from it for years and I cannot begin to tell you how much journalism has helped me throughout the years. When you begin to look up and have more positive moments you could try to see if you could write the yearbook at your school or join a creative writing club. When I was younger, I used to write articles and put them in the local town paper for people to read. Surprisingly, People actually read it! Maybe not my friends.....but a lot of family members and teachers would come up to me asking if the article was mine. It's pretty awesome but I would keep a separate journal just for you to express your feelings and maybe another to write about things in life that are positive but not bad so far!
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