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could you plz rate my essay for school out of 5
Olga Botea
IRLA Per.3
Dec. 3, 2005
Mathilde’s Character analysis
I enjoyed The Necklace, by Guy de Maupassant very much, because of the way he described the main character. The way that he wrote about Mathilde, it seemed as though she existed. In my mind she was a sparkling and shimmering blob of bright colors and laughter. Mathilde is a pretty and charming girl who had little money, and less hope. Mme. Loisel lives in a moderate apartment, and she feels that she needs better. These factors make her extremely ungrateful, shallow, and very imaginative of a better life. Mathilde had married a middle class man named Mr. Loisel. He had very little money, only earning enough to buy essentials, and not the gowns and jewels Mathilde craved. Mr. Loisel did his best to buy all the essentials, but never less, Mathilde remained unsatisfied.
Mathilde is a very ungrateful woman whose husband, clothes, and surroundings never meet up to her expectations. In the short story, it specifically stated that ‘The walls were dirty. The chairs were worn out. The curtains were ugly. All these things another young bride might not have minded at all. But not she!’ Mathilde was not grateful when her husband got an invitation to the ball. She started carrying on about how she couldn’t go because her dress wasn’t fancy enough for the ball, and how wearing flowers instead of jewels was for poor people. Mathilde did not thank her husband even once for the invitation or the money that he gave her to buy the gown. What Mathilde doesn’t understand is that there are many people worse off than her in the world, and she should feel lucky to have a place to live and a loving husband. Therefore, Mathilde is shallow as well.
Mathilde’s traits show the characteristics of being exceedingly shallow. An example of her materialistic obsession is when she complains to her husband about not having a jewel to wear to the ball. “No, I can’t wear flowers”, she sighed. “There is nothing worse than to look poor among other women who are rich.” Another example of Mathilde being shallow is declining the ball invitation because of not having a gown to wear. Mathilde doesn’t care about having fun, or enjoying herself, only about her appearance. All of these selfish actions and thoughts let us see how shallow Mathilde really is. Mathilde probably imagined wearing luxurious gowns and dazzling diamonds everyday.
The third character trait of Madame Mathilde Loisel is being imaginative. She is good at imagining grandeur furnishings and clothes. Mathilde is not satisfied with Mr. Loisel, and she dreams about what would have happened if she had married a richer and more powerful man. During long days, Mms. Loisel would doze off and dream of candlelight diners, large grand rooms, and servants. Instead off trying to improve her lifestyle, she spends her time imagining what could be, and IF. One of the scenes that she imagines is talking to her rich and powerful friends in huge rooms at five o’clock tea. Mathilde fantasizes and dreams so much that she never ends up trying to make those imaginary scenes come true. Thus, Mathilde has an overactive imagination, along with the character traits of being ungrateful and shallow.
In conclusion, Mathilde is an interesting charactor to analyze. I like Mathilde as a character, because we can’t all be perfect, and Mrs. Loisel is an example of this. She made a few mistakes and she tried to make up for them. This is what makes her such a fascinating character to study. Having the character traits of ungrateful, shallow, and imaginative, are only the outer layer of Mrs. Loisel. It would take years to fully understand this woman, because like all human beings, she is twisted and wound around the complexities of the human mind and actions.
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Good analysis, however, just a few tiny things:
- Do not use 'I' in an essay. I'm not sure if it's different over there, but I was taught that essays are never meant to be personal. Whether you 'like' the character or not is irrelevant. You are to analyze them objectively.
- You repeat the word 'shallow' too many times in your essay. There are other ways to explain this. You can explain WHY she is shallow without using the word shallow. You could also try delving more into her character, perhaps the characters background. Why is that she expects so much, why does she fantasise so much, etc. Is she a exaggerated stereotype? Or is she a realistic example of woman today? Try and look into what the author what trying to do with her character.
- The opening paragraph could be a lot stronger. Like I said, this essay is not an opinion peice. What you think about the character doesn't matter.You need a strong beginning to keep your readers attention. Also, I'd get rid of the line 'he wrote about her as if she existed' or at least change it so it sounds a little clearer. Maybe it would be better to say 'The author presented a realistic view of women in those times' (I am unsure when this book is set) or something to that effect
However, well done for the most part. Let me know if you need anymore help. ^_^
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I would rate it about a 4. Your paragraphs started with the same thing. You also repeated a lot of the same things in it. Change up some words. Make it more interesting. If you don't want to that's fine, but it's pretty good. ♥
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hey thats actually really good =) alot of kids from my school totally SUCK at writing but that is a pretty darn good essay mann, love it =)
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