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What do you think of my poem ? Please comment !
Everytime
Everytime you ignore me , my heart shatters
Everytime I see you with Her , I break inside
Everytime you treat me just like a little girl , I feel disappointed in you
You treat me like a game
I’ve sacrificed so much just to be seen worthy in your eyes
Why can’t you do the same ?
I can’t take it anymore ,
I try to break away ,
But I stay firmly bonded to you ,
You’re torturing me more and more each day
Everytime I smile you you ,
You just turn away ,
If you never loved me ,
Why did you have to play ?
Did you ever consider what I thought
Can’t you tell you just threw my heart away
What do you have to say for yourself
Because it’s your fault
I can’t take it anymore ,
I try to break away ,
But I stay firmly bonded to you ,
You’re torturing me more and more each day
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WOW!!! That poem is really good!! I love reading poems. And sadly I can relate to that poem!!! I'm sure many people can relate to that because hearts are broken everyday it seems huh?! So keep up the good work!! I really liked it!
xoxo Kourtney =D
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WOW, I'm just at lost for words, this is good!
A guy did this to me, we totally flirted and got close and then whe nI told him I liked him he acted like I didn't exist. In other words he did what this guy did to you in this poem.
You have talent keep writing!
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sincerely
advice~gurl
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Wow intence! Totally came from the heart! good job
Bianca
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How old are you? It would help my criticism. Based on what I've read here, it's pretty good.
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