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Some people think teens are depressing
But im not im just expressing
My thought and feelings
Bout people and all the killings
But what about all the news
About drunks filled with booze
So if a lil poem is bad
then what about the sad
Look at this pity war
Is it me or is this for
someone to be put in history
For what
......a mystery?
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That is not bad at all!! that is really good! i give u a 7 thumbs up on that one pal!! keep writing!! -trix
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Too cliche.
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It's interesting. I'd try keeping a rhythm, not a rhyme. Rhyming is cool to me because no matter how hard I try, I can't rhyme in poetry. Lol. Rhythm is more important in poetry than rhyme is. Keep that in mind. =)
-Siren
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Oh, I love poerty.com! But don't mind what Chandler said...just take as you need to improve more in writing poems...because I didn't like the choice of words either, but I did love the thought into it. :) Try again or edit.
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I like it. I don't know why people think teens are depressing. And the war in away is a pity i have a brother that is fighting and so i really like this poem. please ignore anyone that says you can't write poetry becasue you can. all my poems i write my peers think are stupid but somehow i keep getting my poems published so ignore anyone that says that. you should summit this to WWW.poetry.com
I like the poem
sincerely
advice~gurl
kat
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