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i'm waiting in the dark
can't approach what seems so big
i forgot every scar
so don't ask what i just did
it's 1:32 a.m.
i'm not afraid of heights
i've got a ripped up brainstem
paralyzed in flight

please put it in the ground
it's bleeding on the floor
the skeletons prance around
like they're welcome anymore
"dear God, i can't feel a thing"
dear God, that's just not me
i'll listen to every song you sing
suonato bella, banshee

addicted to the glittery glow,
i can't tear my eyes away
maybe i should go
what did i just say?
i'm drowning in moonlight
hopeless smiles, hopeless hair
it's getting too damn bright
like all i wanted was always there

i can't remember
much of that awkward, dizzy waltz
kids carry this stuff forever
i feel like it's my fault
i can't accept the truth
i gave up on wishing away
i wasn't raised like you
but it really is okay
everything's okay

What do you get from this poem? Anything that comes to mind at all. Opinion the quality, interesting observations, what you think about the writer, etc. Anything it reminds you of or makes you think of..? Also whether you think it could be a song.

Honestly it sounds like one of those depressing poems "goth" kids write. No offense to anyone, of course, but it just does :/ very depressing, doesn't seem to have a strong message behind it. It's just about general pain and suffering, without any description as to HOW the author suffered. That's my opinion.

15/f
Jessica

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(Rating: 3) Though you didn't mean to be offensive, it sort of comes off that way, especially with the misuse of stereotypes. :/ Just fyi, soemtimes people are general with poetry because it then the emotion applies to more readers, rather than just those who can commiserate to exactly what happened to the author. Thanks for your opinion, though. :]

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