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Writing a rap
I wrote this rap for the song "somebody that I used to know remix" and it's my first rap so tell me if it's good or things that could help the verse. If I should rap fast of slow. You could add more to the verse.
The Verse:
All these voices in my head come as I'm laying in bed
We had it all, I wasn't gonna let you fall
I was in rehab for something I thought I had
Everyone thinks I'm bad.
HEYYYYY
Stop eating your chicken and listen.
You were the one for me
What could be is a mystery.
Don't realized what you done honey bun.
While you were soaking in the sun, I was in the room thinking why do you make me cry, the anger, frustration, DENIAL.
Now I walk a mile with an empty heart and sadness.
Thinking I caused all this madness when it was all you.
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im sorry, but please put down your chicken and listen. that was so bad. im sorry but try something else. not all raps rhyme every single line.
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I'm sorry but this is terrible. Writing lyrics aren't very easy to do. None of this make sense.
In order to be a successful rapper write, you have to take critisim calmly and not to heart.
I mean, there is nothing I can tell you on how to fix it, because it's that bad.
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I mean it's alright. I'm guessing you are new to writing though. but hey we all got to start somewhere
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I like the chicken part, it goes HARD AS FUCK
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