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What should i add to my song to make it better?
ok heres a song[has NOTHING to do with my actual life] i had to write:
And I lay here
Crying myself to sleep
Nobody knows me
Nobody understands me
No one cares too
And I lay here
Turning to a sad song
Only one word repeats in my mind
Love, love, love me
And I lay here
Crying myself to sleep
Nobody knows me
Nobody understands me
Cares to, oh
And I lay here
I lay here
Talking to myself
Everything that’s good
Everything that’s good
Everything that’s good ‘bout me
All I want
Is my happy ending
To know I’m loved
Securely loved
Gently love
By you
The inspiration
To keep walking
This path of lies
This inspiration
To keep going on
Has all died
And I lay here
Crying myself to sleep
Crying myself to..
And I lay here
Nobody knows me
Nobody understands me
Nobody cares to
Nobody cares..
Cares to
what should i add/take away to make it better? any suggesttions would be appriciated
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for one u should stop being such an emo pussy but neway make it less depressing and more rock/ classic rock
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ok well you know how it says "no one cares to" then later it says "nobody cares to" ok well you should make it consistant. like dont cahnge from no one to nobody [in my opinion nobody would be better]
other than that its very good and i know a lot of people will relate to your song. good luck with it!
SAM
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