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murder mystery
ok so i'm writing a story. Its about a little girl wo is very afraid of her dentist. She thinks that he is a murderer who wants to kill her mom and is very observant of what is going on. The truth is that his mom is having an affair with the dentist, but the story is told kind of scarily as if it is really a murder mystery. it would be more in depth and exciting in the real story, but what i'm wondering is:
should i write it from the point of view of the little girl who's only seven? or should it be from a narrator's point of view who talks about what the girl is thinking and stuff. It would be easier to make the writing better from a narrators point of view, but would it be more effective to write it from the little girl's perspective?
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i would think the narrator's point because 7 year olds don't have a very wide span of vocabulary, and i love reading books with words that i'm not used to seeing, but that is just my opinon, and also i don't think the little girl could understand the "affair", like she wouldn't really know what her mom was talking about when she explains what happens :]
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well i would say from a narrators point only because the girl is only seven and most 7 yearolds arent really that keen on whats going around them and dont have that broad of a mind so that wont give you much to work with. so it wouldnt be very believable to the reader. i think you should go with the narrators point of view unless your will to up the little girls age a couple years to about 9 or ten then it would be more effective to write from the girls perspective.
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girls perspective and i say that because like everytime someone does a story like that i just always want to keep on reading! Do it!!
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For this particular case I have not advice but I have general advice on methods of narration that can help you decide for not only this story but any others following.
First Person Major
(Advantages:)
Give illusion of a story teller.
Excellent for use of irony.
Reader identifies with character more easily.
Authority of eyewitness-more real and intimate.
(Disadvantages:)
May give impression of conceit.
Usually told from a biased point of view.
Main character is (usually) unable to die.
First Person Minor
(Advantages:)
May describe main character directly and or all characters.
Suspense and surprise created by concealing thoughts of main character.
(Disadvantages:)
Presence must always be justified.
Third Person Omniscient (all knowing)
(Advantages:)
Author can reveal thoughts of any character.
Author can explain and comment signifigances.
(Disadvantages:)
May result in lack of focus or emphasis.
Not realistic.
Hampers reader from reaching own coclusions.
Third Person Objective (limited)
(Advantages:)
Flexible-allows main character to die at end.
Author can describe and comment on character.
More objective-dramatic-reader makes own judgments.
(Disadvantages:)
Limits reader's knowledge of action to what central character expeiriences.
Reader loses depth based on character's feelings and thoughts.
Third Person Central Character
(Advantages:)
Effect of first person narraction with no danger of vainity or egoism.
Allows reader to draw own conclusions regarding other characters.
(Disadvantages:)
May lack intimacy of first person narration.
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telling the story from the child's point of view, while remaining that the child is observant and quite intelligent for her age...but naive.
you can still write intelligently from the child's point of view, but making her observations wrong will be the showing of her age. Such as, she sees her mother and the dentist kissing and decribes it, making it clear to the reader that they were kissing, but her saying that she thinks he was attacking her. "I walked in to see his lips pressed upon his, her arms around his body, it was clear she needed help! He was attacking her, I was sure, she was merely struggling to get him off." or even have her find a note form the dentist to the mother have some suggestive metaphors and have the girl translate it as a death threat or soemthing. that is what I am talking about, intelligently writtern but naive.
this will make for an entertaining and cute story, you could reveal the affair in the ending when her mother explains it to her or somebody older says a key word and she pieces the puzzle together.
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I would write it both ways & then decide which is better. Personally, you can work her thoughts in when you tell it from her perspective, but both ideas of which way to tell it sounds good to me. :]
♥T!NA
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congrats bout the story!
i personally think it should be from the little girls point of view so the reader doesnt know about the affair and it will be a suprise at the end when she knows the truth. it will be a mystery to the readers cause the little girl is saying what she thinks is happing. then it will be a true mystery! mabie you can also include like some entrys of the girls diary to tell what shes thinking after each chapter
goodluck sounds like a good prompt--ashley
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