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Poem for a birthday?
You can skip the background and just tell me if the poem is too personal to give to someone you've only met a few days ago if you want.
Ok so I met this guy a few days ago and he's perfect but I'm still not over this other guy. This guy is seriously awesome, he's -very- good looking, he's a cook and he spent all of today helping me fix my dining table because he fell on it the night before and broke, and he even paid for everything to fix it and extra stuff to make it look better because he said it was totally his fault. Anyway, he got out of a long relationship a few months ago and he today he had a first date with a girl he likes so there isn't much of a chance of us working out and I'm too hung up on another guy. Keeping this in mind, his birthday is coming up and he asked me to write him a poem because he likes personalized presents and he heard I wrote sometimes.
We met on Thursday and spent about four days in a row together. I'm writing him a poem and framing it. I wrote it directly from my heart and now I'm thinking it's a little too personal for someone I haven't known for more than a week. He said he wanted something really truthful because I warned him but I don't want to look foolish and I still want to be his friend. So is it too close?
What a guy.
You’re such a man
You're such a boy.
Your naive miniscule hopes and dreams
leave me in tears every time
you venture to say a word,
blinking with the beat of your heart.
Wrench my stomach into knots,
why don't you?
As I think of the clarity in your eyes
and I surmise
it's been a while
since you've been hurt.
The way you talk
and smile when you recall
how you were together
and refrain
from saying her name
and just refer to her as her.
Fictitious daydreams in my mind,
And I ask the world
to make you feel that way about me
not out of love or lust,
only for the sake of having you.
How strangely perfect
you are for me,
but cupid knows
that the subtle ache in my chest
and those cardiac arrests
aren’t for you
But wow, you’re such a guy.
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Great words! I like the poem and hope the guy does too. Don't worry about what other people think because if that is what is in your heart and you find comfort in writing it down, do it. Keep a copy of it and add any more poems that come to mind. You never know one day you may have enough to publish it. Good luck.
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some of its a little wow... but i like it... and it kinda seems like love at first sight... maybe??? i say go for it.... think of anchorman.. you know he's like "if you dont like it you can throw it right back"... i would forget about the other guy... the easiest way to get your mind off of the old guy is to find a new one :)
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Maybe its way too personal since you are just friends but mostly because you met him for a short time.But then I'm thinking he he reads this of how you feel about him he will most probably respond back the way you want him to or get you too much closer.So you decide if you want to change it and if I were you I would take the chance you never know what may happen.
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hey, well some of the verses are a little "deep" but other then that i think its sweet.
-caitt<3
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