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Poems...
"Run Away"
Run, run, run away.
Run away for it’s just begun.
Nothing is left to learn; nothing can be done.
Run away and never return.
Don't let it burn just,
Run, run, run away.
Don't confront the fears.
Run away and leave the tears.
Don't retreat.
It'll show defeat, so just,
Run, run, run away
"Life"
So much anger; so much sadness.
How'd I get myself wound up in all this madness?
To much stress; to much drama.
How do I clear up this mess?
So many tears; so little fears.
It's been like this for years.
Just young; trying to have fun.
Not many smiles; not many dreams.
All I hear are distant screams.
Lot's of fights; including sleepless night.
I'm trying...
But there's so much lying; so much crying...
"I am"
People say I'm a sinner.
But I'm just a beginner.
Yea, I've done some things wrong.
But that's what makes me strong,
I take life for how it is.
I live my life around the people I adore.
I am who I am; why do they care?
Why do they always sit and stare?
I know I'm not the worst,
But I am the first to stand up and say,
I am who I am.
- Are these any good? Be honest please!! And if you don't like them or would change something about them tell me!
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I like them all I really like the first one i showed my friend that one i thought it was pretty good keep up the work!! I would like to see more of your work!! so keep em coming!! -trix
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Wow your peoms are deep. I love "I am" I totally understand.
"Life" I, I can't quite expalin what I feel when I read these but they seriosly really good.
You have a talent and keep it up, check out this website. WWW.Poetry.com If you go there you can see some of mine ( there not that good all my other ones are not on the website)
Im Kathleen J Bare.
Sincerely
advice~gurl
kat
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First thing's first: COPYRIGHT THEM!!!! NOW!!! Just put the little copyright symbol somewhere on here and the date and your name/ nickname/forum name, and nobody can legally take them.
Now, I really like both of them. ^_^ "Life" is my favorite. I think it's the most original; it is brilliant.
On "Life" and "I am," watch your punctuation. All the semi-colons tend to get in the way and distract the reader. Other than that, I really like them! If you want help getting published, contact me.
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<span style="background: url([Link](Mouse over link to see full location); I LOVE THEM!!!! They are really good!!! It seems like you've been through a lot emotionally and you are putting that into your poems!! And that's what makes poetry as special as it is! Keep writing them and you will get far! Good job, sweetie!! Love ya -Mandee </span>
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they are amazing...
"Run Away" i love it perfect rhyme skeem and spacing.. but doYOU really run away from yuor fears? the tone sets as though yuo are already on the run.. maybe you should face wahtever is behind you before it overtakes you! But i love this poem..
"Life" wow this is an intimate peom i love it!really captures your feelings!
"I am" sooo fricken impowering, my favorite of them all!
KEEP WRITING, YOU HAVE A GIFT
BE CAREFUL OF PUTTING THOSE ON THE WEB IF PEOPLE STEAL PICTURES, YOU KNOW! THEY WILL STEAL POEMS!
g_o_o_d l_u_c_k w/ your writing and keeping those form getting stolen!
~*~Cassie~*~
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