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a poem for my friend
13/m
ok so i recently began to get interested in writing poetry. i have started to write one for my friend sam(girl)and i wanted to see if anyone here thought it was any good. maybe some constructive critisism. and any tips on how to become a better writer/poet. ok so heres the poem
We met on a crowded school camp bus
And we became friends as soon as someone introduced us,
I remember the twinkle, in your eye
As we moved in closer to each say ‘hi’
We hung out a lot after that day
My feelings for you never went away,
Every time I saw you, I felt like I was blessed
And thought that you had to be the best dressed,
That was a long time ago
And I still wish with you, we could go to the snow....
And have lots of fun till the day is over,
And stay up trying to look for Grover
Things have happened since that time,
I hope you have liked my silly rhyme.
One day you might think back and laugh,
While you’re lying in a bath,
Or it might even be when you see a giraffe
Thank you and goodnight.
it was kinda just a muck around starting thing. but just as a rhyming thing
and i was reading on some website that lots of poems dont rhyme and are usually better if they dont but just to be cute i guess haha
so any tips would be good.
thanks
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any poem by a guy for his friend thats a girl is usually good, but you made a better one than I can expect from guys, nice!
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