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poetry
so i like to write poetry, but im not sure if im any good.
would someone read this and tell me if its okay? and i want an honest answer, im not asking because im insecure, but because i really dont know.
A group of three friends is always a risk
because someone becomes the third wheel
and though I know that this is happening,
it almost seems surreal.
it can be really hard to hurt me,
but he was my Achilles’ heel.
All I want is to numb myself,
but I cant help but to feel.
I didn’t know you loved him
but, well, now I do.
and I didn’t think he liked you
but I guess it’s true
you’ve been there for me, always
but I love him, and you.
so although I'm really jealous,
I’m happy for you, too.
I never said I loved him
but I guess I was confused.
And I know us three were great
But pairs always come in two’s.
Life would be fine if we both got him
but I know he had to choose
so though I wish I could have won
I’d hate to see you lose.
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twas ok, i kno u could do better though. If you want my help then just ask. Go here (www.zenhex.com) its a poetry site. make your own profile and post poetry away...my screenname on there is BMXRider if you have any questions...or u can get me on here...good luck
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I didn't really like it, but it's alright. Nothing special.
♥T!NA
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It's ok, Its average. Its not really unique and kind of predictable.Keep at it though.Its not terrible..just average.
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omgosh....
that is sooo good.
what are you talking about you don't know?
that is sooo true...
i absultely love it...
=D
if you have anymore do you mind sharing them with me in my inbox...??
it was really good.
-taylor mackenzie
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