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Cover Letter
Could anyone please take a look at this cover letter for me and give me a few tips and hints or tell me how to polish it up? Thank you.
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July 17th, 2005
Store Manager
XXXXXX
Dear Sir / Madam,
I would like to apply for the position of a part-time sales associate at XXXXXX.
I admire the upbeat environment in your store and am sure that I will fit in nicely with your staff and the image XXXXXX portrays to
customers. I am sure that you will find that I will be a hardworking and passionate employee as I am very knowledgeable in fashion and
accessories and am always eager to make shopping an enjoyable experience for anyone who steps into the store.
Thank you for considering me as a potential member of your team. I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours Sincerely,
XXXXXX XXXX.
XXXXXXXXXXXXX@gmail.com
XXXX XXXXXXXXX XXXXX,
XXXXXXXXX, B.C.
XXX XXX
(604) XXX-XXXX
Enclosed: Resume
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For the date you wrote 2005 it's 2006. Other than that it's great. Hope I helped.
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I agree! It's VERY good!!! It sounds very professional!!! Good Job! ...and good luck with this job :]
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It's great! People always like an upbeat cover letter. The only thing that I can possibly think of suggesting is to shorten your "I am sure that you will find that I will be a hardworking and passionate employee..." sentance. It looks like you know what you're doing. Good luck getting your job!
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I think it's great! Very good choice of words. And I think this store would be lucky to hire you.
Let me know if you get the job or not.
Good luck!
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