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tell me what you think..its a poem i wrote
im sick of this
i want it all to end
take the gun to my head
what do you know im not dead
i wonder if someone will miss me
i wonder if someone will cry
but hey they will probably smile caz im now out of their lives
i dont know why im like this
i dont know why i said what i said
maybe its caz im crazy
thats what they said
these times are suppose to be the best in my life
im suppose to be happy thats what everyones said
happy yah thats right
why am i so sad and so empty inside
maybe i need someone to help me
but why would anyone want to help this girl get by?
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i like the poem a lot mayb it is because i think of doin the samething to myself but in the end it reallyy isnt worth it wasting you once in a life time chance of living and just killing yourself because you dont wan to live it. but anyways the only thing i things i think you should change in it are in line 8 change said to say, in line 10 change said to say, line 11 suppose to supposed, and line 12 said to say. otherwise you did a greast job. hope this helps you out.
*~Stephanie~*
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Its great. I also thinks its awesome that you are writing your emotions and feelings in poems. You are really good at it and if you ever need anything else we are all always here for you. =] ♥ ex__oOh
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it sounds to me like you want to kill your self. but don't you'll be glad you didn't
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Writing poems is a good way to help deal with emotions... But if you ever need to talk you can e-mail on my hotmail account or on here...
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thats really good!
but instead of saying "thats what they said" on the 11th line...try saying "thats what they all said" it makes the rhyming sound better.
~natt~
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Try finding God in your life. The time where you feel the lowest in your life is when he will get you through everything. You are an important person no matter what. No one will be happy if you are not around, Trust me. I have felt the way you do so many times. but it turns out that life is really not that bad. You just gotta toughen up in your times of troubles because it wont always be like that.
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