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SUCKED YOU UP
this is a poem I wrote and i wanted to get feed back from peopel i dont know please tell me wat you trully think about it and you may not use it unless you give Ruperts_gurl credit thanx :
Sucked you up
I sucked you up
into a world of heart ache and pain
i told you what you wanted to hear
things i took for granted
I fooled you and myself
into believing i was good
good and caring enough
for a healthy relationship
you believed i cared
and i did until
i realized that i corrupted you
i sucked you up
into my drama queen world
i brought you into the prison of my life
i watch your beautiful tears
stream down your face
as i walk away forever
i love you
but i am spitting you out
so i dont hurt you any more
<3 Rachael A.K.A. Ruperts_gurl
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DUDE! This is frickin awesome!! You should write more poems!!! Keep it up dude!!! U ROCK!
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Hmm its interesting sounds to me and i get the idea from the poem as if you are hurting someone and walking away for good , officially but good job-trix
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I love your poem and I think you have great talent. You should send it to poetry.com I have a really sucky one in there (emily willcox). Hope I've helped some.
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I'm sorry you have gotten answers like that. thats not true I like your poem and please ignore those that just enjoy making other people feel bad.
this is a good poem and honestly I think you have talent and I think that you should summit it to www.poetry.com you may have it published i had one of my poems published that was the worst poem to me. (while you go to poetry.com check my poetry out, i only have a couple good ones on there but type in Kathleen bare my mid intail in J)
oh okay I thought it was about a break up but about your friends that makes sence even more but let me tell you this your friends are your friends and they like you for who yyou are and you shouldn't worry.
sincerely
advice~gurl
kat
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well thats not the best poem i ever heard but i liked it was ok keep up the good poems
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