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Hey, I love to sing, i take voice lessons and stuff so i know a lot about music, so if you have ne questions about music in singing or instruments, I would be more than happy to answer them. you can IM or email me(IM is below) I am also a poetry and song writing fanatic so you can ask questions about that too. My favourite topics are music and bois (two most difficult exciting things)I am practically happier than i have ever been but i do know what it is like to go through really rough times. I have had a series of extreme problems that i got over and i would like to help anyone get over their problems. I am mostly good with people with any sort of personal problem like an eating disorder or ADD or something like that.

You can ask me anything, i'll answer it.

FUTURE: GONNA BE A SINGER (SO REMEMBER ME)

AGE: 14

FAV SONG: IMPOSSIBLE, STAIRWAY TO HEAVEN

FAV BAND: LED ZEPPELIN (CHRISTINA AGUILERA)

HAIR: ALWAYS DIFFERENT LOL

~*LIZZY*~

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I'm not sure i got this poem sounding right; anyone please gimme a hand.

Fallen Hero

I looked up to a figure
I once deemed to be the best.
But as time slipped to the second,
My faith was put to the test.

Me hero was declined
Of his powerful throne,
Shoved to the side
And deprived of all he called his own.

I stood with the disappointed
Who late looked him on,
And surprisingly found myself
Not nearly as drawn.

As I turned my back,
Shaking my head,
He uttered his final words
And the next second he’s dead.

I found myself thinking twice
Of what I had once thought.
After hearing his words,
My attention, he begot.

“Take care of your hate,
“For soon you’ll regret
“For not helping the one
“To whom your actions were once set.

“Don’t be afraid of difference-
“That’s what makes us all unique.
“If we copied and begged sameness,
“Then all would be bleak.

“Cherish what you believe
“And this is the last I have to say:
“Don’t turn your back again
Like you’d done today.”

**!~Denice~!**

It all sounded awesome except for the beat seemed to be a little off in the second stanza fourth line. Maybe if you shortened that line two beats it would be better, unless it's supposed to sound like that. It is really good!!!
Lizzy

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