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re:please someone correct my poem?
hi thanks for answering but i have a question is my poem deep? if not how do i make it deep? thank you
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Your poem is somewhat deep. If a stranger read it, it probably wouldn't emotionally affect them unless they'd had a similar experience recently, however if your friend read it it might affect her.
There's no one way to make poems deeper. Try going more into detail on your reponse: "My throat tightened and tears stung my eyes", or using a more dramatic way of saying things: "She turned around" vs. "She threw her final glance over her shoulder, the last time I'd see her ever." You could also try exploring deeper themes such as why humans have such a negative reaction to change, or just make your poem more generalized about humanity as a whole.
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