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please help, its for tomorrow!
Dear, good writer..
i need help! everytime i writean essay for my english teacher she says "you were one step away from an A, BUT you need to work on your introductions!" so would you please help me, i dont even know where to start, like i have absoloutly no imagination or creativity at all, i dont know how you people do it! The essay is on William Harvey,.. i found this introduction I thought was great:
"What would it have been like to be a scientist in the time of Shakespeare? Best seats at the Globe Theater and invitations to command performances alongside the King and Queen? Why not, if you are married to the daughter of the Queen's physician? Better yet if you have been appointed physician to the King himself.
By all accounts, William Harvey led a charmed life."
But I didn't want to copy it, so I changed it to my own words but made it resemble a bit.. and whn i showed it to my teacher she said "that's good, but dont use that for your essay, use that for your oral presentation on your essay, that's better!" so now i have nothing, what do you think i should do for the introduction? And do you have any ideas of how to come up with introductions for the future, like is there any good way of thinking? are there any tricks?
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Well I don't know if this will help you out at all, ( I hope it does, because it helped me), but i have learned since practically 8th-9th grade (im going to be a senior in september) that you want to open the intro with a clincher sentence that will grab the reader's attention and it has to be a broad statement that can be further developed.
After that, you want to consistently become more specific in your topic, leaving the last sentence to be the most specific.
If you have any more specific questions, feel free to ask me. I'm kind of just going off the top of my head with suggestions. Don't hesitate to ask me (or even your teacher -- they know what they want to see the most!)
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