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poem.
I don't know what category this should be under.
So basically I wrote this poem.
I just want feed back. Is it good?
Is it bad?
What should I change?
She looks out the window with intent
Searching for anything to fill this void
The emptiness he left her with
A pang of sorrow in her stomach
Her nose stings with despair
Her eyes stained with misery
Her heart broken in two
A break that’s seems unfixable
So many people around
Yet she feels so alone
Without his arms wrapped around her
Without his gentle whisper in her ear
Also if you could think of an awesome title
that would be great!
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I'm a writer too and I think you have a really good start going...but don't stop it like that....you kinda left the reader hangin when you say without his gentle whisper in her ear....i wanna know what else....want more will happen...what shes longing for
Titles? : 1. Watching and Waiting For Something More
2. The Pain You Put me Through
3. The Emptiness I've Become
4. A Lover's Abyss
Good Luck! I hope this helped!
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