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checking my pulse (poem)
ok i dunno if i like this poem i wrote can you guys help me
Checking my pulse:
checking my pulse
trying to see if i'm alive
as i lay here
me sweat making my hair stick to my face
my heart pounding
my stomach spinning
checking my pulse
becuase i just told you
how i feel
i feel as if i've been lifted away
into a world unknown to me
into a world lead by you
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Excellent! ~trix
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I love it. Reminds me of a certian guy
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Wow, that was good. It's like how I felt when I think of my boyfriend. Thanx for sharing your poem with me!
~Chelsea~
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It was a little stange and I didnt really get what you were talking about but its a good poem.
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hey i just posted one of my poems look at it
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It sounds like a pretty good poem. What I got from it is you like this guy and you feel like you have died and gone to heaven and pretty much your version of heaven some kind of world that focuses around this guy you like. Did I get that right?
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I thought it was amazing! Wow! At first I was like why the hell is she checking her pulse... but it all adds up in the end. Thats great, keep doing it!! Good luck with your writing!
LoVe,
HeAtHeR!! *Rate me please!*
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