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NO MORE
You laugh at me. You point, you say "how Weird" you say "how Ugly" you say "how Stupid".
I turn the other cheek so you can just laugh and point some more.
I have cryed my tears. I have hated myself for you.
I will always be here and you can't change that.
You will never make me feel bad again. NEVER!
So you better give up!

When I see you I laugh and say "How Pathetic!".
You have put me through this to make yourself feel good.
No More.

I have cryed my tears. I have hated myself for you But no more.
K.J.B.

Hi all advicenators! This is the only peom I have been able to write in the last 4 months and I was wondering if this is a good poem. i also want to know if I did all punctuation right? please answer it would be helpful.
K.J.B.

Humm, its not bad, but cryed is cried, and I would seperate the first line a bit:
You laugh at me,
you point.
You say "how Weird!"
"how Ugly!"
"how Stupid."

I don't think you need the second line, or maybe chnage it to the past tense: 'I have turned the other cheek, but still you laugh and point more.'

Maybe the fourth line shoud start with 'but'.

The second stanza [verse] could be longer, detailing how you have gotten over them.

Yeah, its not bad, but could use some work :)

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(Rating: 5) Yeah I figured it needed work but wanted to know wha other people thought of it. Thanx
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