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Its MaRiAhWaNnAbE
Hey guys it is MariahWannabe and I wanted to ask you guys your opnion, I like to songwrite and I like to write poems,
I'm joined on allpoetry.com and I want your full opnion on my poem I wrote below :
I hid my secrets and dreams into a special box,
But I never trusted anyone so I added on a lock,
I thought if I let someone, take away the key,
they'd see my past, and see the real me.
I have shield that I put around my feelings and heart,
So if someone decides to cause me pain,
I'll never fall apart,
How can I ever put down my sheild for you?
Because I don't know if it's pain you'll put me through.
You're saying it's no pressure,
and that you understand,
How do I know?
You gently touch my hand.
How do I know that you'll pick me up when I fall?
and you're the one that's going to make me stand tall.
I can't put my sheild down,I don't want to get hurt,
My pride and feelings is all it's worth,
Just promise me something,
After, Give me back the key,
Because I can't handle everyone,
knowing the real me.
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