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please fix this sentence
i've already asked a question about my first paragraph. I now need help on this sentence. Please read the first paragraph.
My Room
The typical teenage bedroom can be quite horrific. There is a disgusting stench that hits your nostrils from the sweaty track clothes and smelly socks. You will most likely trip the blankets which are scattered about from last week's slumber party. The tubes of lip stick along with nail polish bottles, makeup everywhere, yes, this is the typical, female, teenage bedroom. Luckily, I am one who does not fit into that category. I am actually quite different than explained.
As you walk in my room your brain might be alarmed by the tidyness. Your nose will tickle from the smell of freshly applied pledge.
I want to find a different wording for the very last sentence. [freshly applied pledge, it sounds cheesy]
please get back to this asap
its due tommorrow
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