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feedback?
I am writing a story, and I would like honest feedback.
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that's the link to the story (:
and then can you please tell me what you think, and what i should improve?
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The writing style is pretty good. But there is no real conflict in the story; it's boring.
+Vocabulary
+Writing style
-HTML Layout (put text in the main page, not the scroll box)
--Action
-Length (too short for a real story)
-Frequent POV change
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