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I Need Ideas For My Book!!!!
13/f
I'm writing a book about a Naruto, but I added some of my own characters. I'm not publishing this book, I just liek to show it to my family, anyway, this is what I have in the last part that I wrote,
I suddenly fell through a hole in the floor. Orochimaru, Zabuza and I were now standing in a cave with tons of other caves leading off it. I was dragged behind Zabuza. I looked around. Bodies were hanging everywhere. Form the ceilings, walls, even lying in the middle of the walkway. We soon entered a bigger cave. Orochimaru when and sat down at a chair by a huge flow of waterfalls. I was thrown down beside Orochimaru. I jumped to get up, but Zabuza pushed me back down. I sat there and watched Zabuza go get a bucket full of kunai knives and needles. I gulped. Why was he getting those? I shrank back as Zabuza went to grab me. He grabbed me by the front of my sweater and dragged me across the room. I struggled to pull away, but nothing worked. I heard Orochimaru call my father. I shivered. No! This is my past playing over again! Zabuza threw me against a wall. I watched as my father walked in. I pressed my body against the wall. My father saw me and blew. He approached me and slapped my face. I was too scared to use any jutsu. He ripped my sweater off and my shorts. I sat there in just my underwear. I felt embarrassed and scared. My father walked to Orochimaru and took the knives and needles. He began to through them all at the same time.
“Stop!” I shouted as one needle hit my shoulder. I quickly pulled it out. A kunai knife sliced past my leg, causing blood to seep through. I held my breath as more sharp points hit my face, hips, arms, legs and feet and hands. I covered my head.
Finally, the throwing stopped. I knew I knew I was covered in blood...
I'm stuck, so if somebody could just give me a few little ideas for this book, I'll be very grateful! Thank you!
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wow, I dont think you need to add anything. I think it's great. But maybe ummmm.
I knew I was covered in blood. The pain wouldn't stop, and it felt like I couldn't breath. Everything seemed to go blury, but before it went black, I saw Sasuke! He was here, here to rescue me.
idk. But Im a writer too. Just try to, you know, keep it interesting
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