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so ive been writing poems and i was wondering if you could read them and tell me what you think:)
they're kind of depressing..
Her skin tells her story
Her arms recite her past
Her face is full of sorrow
Her smile will never last
What once started out so simple
Soon spiraled out of control
She thought she’d never let it go too far
But she was lost after her first scar
She mistakenly turned to a sick obsession
She found release in her own pain
She used her blade as her own weapon
And could breathe from the scarlet stain
If you looked at her you’d never know
She never lets her pain show
She hides behind laughter and smiles
All her problems look so mild
So when she tells you her story
When she admits to her past
Maybe you’ll understand her sorrow
And why her smile never lasts
her arms are scarred and bloody
her face is black and blue
her feet are wet and muddy
and theres nothing she can do
shes blinded by her tears
shes chained up to the wall
but in the darkness she can hear
footsteps in the hall
silently she waits
for the opening of the door
the withered face of sorrow
greets her with hands that are torn
she counts her highest heart beats
and swallows every breath
opening her eyes slowly
she stares into the face of death
no one can ever guess
the secrets within a knife
he presses the blade to her chest
and slowly ends her life
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wow this is great!this hit me hard becouse i suffer what the girl in your poem is going through.you nailed it.weird to see it all written down though.have you gone truogh this?becouse its hard to write like that if u just explaining someone els........join a poetry website and share theese
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Rating: 5
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Thank you! And yes I have been through the stuff in the first poem but not the second one
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