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ok so i wrote this poem and i want some feedback on it. If u dont like it, please be nice about it. lol. Thanks. Also tips and suggestions are welcomed. :) and also, it has no name so....here it is;
The overwelming feeling you get in your chest.
The tear jeaking moments of joy.
Unforgetable Happiness,
The long, endless nights together.
Little trivial things in life
Butterflys fluttering around in your tummy, the feeling of being able to fly light as air.
The never ending feeling of pure joy.
Knock Knock Knock.
The stomach droping moment they leave forever.
The tears and heartache day after day never ending pain.
The endless nights crying and wishing they'd come back.
Empty, Empty, Empty is all you feel.
The hollowed out place youe heart once was.
Until finialy, You feeling nothing ar all except pain. Then you relize what really happened...and its to late to change it back.
Until...It starts all over again.
-Callie
I LOVED IT. Your an awsome writer. its good write more.
(Rating: 5) thanks