Member Since: July 31, 2007
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Last Update: August 11, 2007
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Someone please tell me how I can make my story better[its based on my life, so I don't want to lie about anything]
http://www.buddy4u.com/view/?u=storyytimee
Thanks so much! Leave reviews too. (link)
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I would say go into more detail about the important events. How you felt, how it smelled, the weather, what you were wearing...I mean, relevant things, but details always make stories more interesting and easier to relate to.
And watch your use of the word 'but.' Try some other connectors or prepositions to structure your sentences - such as: after, before, except for, on, since, throughout, toward. It gives sentences more movement and interest.
Good start!
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