Hey, my name is Fyce. Well, not really, ubt that's my psuedoname. My favorite websites are Homestar Runner, Waterman Studios, and HR Wiki.
I like a lot of music, like System of a Down, Evanescence, and Breaking Benjamin.
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In literacy we are doing a descriptive essay in which we are describing our room. My first paragraph needs some help and i've got nobody home to help.
heres the paragraph
My Room
The typical teenage bedroom can be quite horific. The smell that hits your nostrils from the sweaty track clothes and smelly socks. The crumbs from several week old poptarts swim between your toes, and you'll most likely trip over the blankets which are scattered about from last nights slumber party and the tubes of lip stick along with nail polish bottles. Like i said that can be the typical teenage bedroom, and so from that, I can say i don't fit into that cateogory. I'm actually quite different than explained.
please fix the like 2,3,4 senteences. they are like run-ons and i can't fix them. please help! (link)
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How 'bout this?
My Room
The typical teenage bedroom can be quite horrific. There is a disgusting stench that hits your nostrils from the sweaty track clothes and smelly socks. The crumbs from several week-old Pop Tarts swim between your toes, and you will most likely trip over the tubes of lip stick and nail polish bottles, as well as the blankets which are scattered about from last night's slumber party. Like I said, that is the typical teenage bedroom, and from that, I can say I don't fit into that category. I am actually quite different than explained.
Glad to help,
-Fyce
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Rating: 5
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thank you very much
do you think its good?
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