Pretty average dude overall. Living in Scotland, just graduated, not loads else to say :)
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In front of me I see a piece of art.
It does not hurt my eyes, but will hurt some.
There are those that would tear the pic apart.
It is history, why give it the thumb?
A picture may be beautiful to many,
To most, in the eye of the beholder.
At sale, it may bring a pretty penny,
Don’t rip from the frame, let pic grow older.
It is time to embrace the past, come sit;
Let history teach, let the light flicker.
Do not throw the pic in the fire pit,
Hear the story of the cotton picker.
Keep your thoughts clear, keep thoughts open-minded,
See the past as the past, don’t be blinded!
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Looks good on syllable counts overall, I think line 1 of stanza 2 is too long. Maybe chance beautiful to handsome or comely. Also don't forget the alternating stressed/unstressed syllables. I'd also be reluctant to repeat thoughts twice in one line, could say notions or somesuch.
Also remember Shakespeare did so well partly because he broke a lot of conventions (guy invented a lot of words), resultingly you shouldn't feel too bound to anything.
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