Member Since: August 29, 2012
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Last Update: August 29, 2012
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i dont like to whine,but cut myself burn myself bruise myself am bullied and have depression and i wrote this poem about it and ive suffered with self harm for about 4 years and i would like to have feedback on whether or not its any good....sorry there sad
Words hurt
and no razor can take that away from me
my sleeves were
once white but now stained red
the truth burns
more than any match can tell
i hide
behind the blood and the bruises
i worry that
some day someone will see through me
and ill have to face the scars
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Uncle John ....From England ( Coventry ) Lets get to the point , Like your poem but have modified it ( Can you play guitar ? If not I will help you ).................................Lets try your fantastic poem and change it to a Bob Dylan song.......The chords I give you are not correct but it will give you a good start :
No razor can take my pain away
My sleeves were white now they are red
I cant take any more of life am sure
the bruise on my cheek
The answer my friend is blowing in the wind
The answer is blowing in the wind
I am 63 years of age love my wife and have 4 Grand children.....Just fell on this site .....Your poetry reached me but you have to put it to song............Can you obtain a guitar ? It is quite easy to learn what I have adjusted ...A
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hey i cant plat guitar i play flute and piano but i can learn ur right it would be a good song thanks for the advice i cant sing very wellbut ill try.im 13 by the way,my dad knows guitar im learning kinda
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