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Q: so i like to write poetry, but im not sure if im any good.
would someone read this and tell me if its okay? and i want an honest answer, im not asking because im insecure, but because i really dont know.

A group of three friends is always a risk
because someone becomes the third wheel
and though I know that this is happening,
it almost seems surreal.
it can be really hard to hurt me,
but he was my Achilles’ heel.
All I want is to numb myself,
but I cant help but to feel.

I didn’t know you loved him
but, well, now I do.
and I didn’t think he liked you
but I guess it’s true
you’ve been there for me, always
but I love him, and you.
so although I'm really jealous,
I’m happy for you, too.

I never said I loved him
but I guess I was confused.
And I know us three were great
But pairs always come in two’s.
Life would be fine if we both got him
but I know he had to choose
so though I wish I could have won
I’d hate to see you lose.

twas ok, i kno u could do better though. If you want my help then just ask. Go here (www.zenhex.com) its a poetry site. make your own profile and post poetry away...my screenname on there is BMXRider if you have any questions...or u can get me on here...good luck

thank, that really helped.

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BMXPoet
names ryan, and im basically just here to help you guys out...ive been through most of the stuff you could ask about (cept all that being a female stuff) and i know how shitty life can be without someone there for you, helpin you through the tough times y'know? so yeah, ask me about anything you want to, i honestly dont care WHAT you ask me about, ill try to help you out the best i can no matter what...but yeah, i got a LOT of experience in the areas of love, depression, loss, suicide, and all that other nice stuff....well, ill be readin what you ask kk? catch ya later...

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