Hey everyone!!I can usually answer anything and everything, just ask me!! I'm not the kinda girl that judges, i just tell the truth. I'm fun, i am hilarious!,and i'm a brunette, so i'm must be smart (no offense blondes, just kidding!(^;So ask me!! I'll answer your question, but pleaseeeee, if you have time, comment on my answers in feedback. Thanks!
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Well I wrote this, not really a poem, just kind of a one of those little writings.. will you tell me what you think of it so far... maybe some help on it, or wordings that would sound better?
After spending hours on end perfecting every detail about herself, she heard the doorbell ring. Her heart races to see him. This was the moment she had been waiting for, for so very long now.She lopes quickly to the front door and swiftly swings it open to see her love. Her heart sinks inside of her chest in her overwhelmed body and her beathing has stopped as if her heart would have. He looks amazing, more amazing than ever before. Not a word comes out of either of their mouths, both stand there completely speechless, both infatuated by their prescences's beauty... (link)
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That is such a good little story thing! Is that from experience, just wondering because that is so beautiful. Tell me in some feedback b/c i really want to know. You are a great writer. Keep on writing, you may have a future in it! Hope i helped!
Thanks,
Jenna
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Rating: 5
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Thanks:-) I actually don't remember my inspiration for writing this, i was just looking through a few of my old writings and i found this one and decided to edit it and see what people thought of it! thanks again
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