I'm a fourteen year old girl from California. I'm a rabid liberal/feminist an a writer. I've been through cutting, and I'll try not to give bad advice. Ask me whatever you like . . . I'm not so good on romance questions, with a lack of any significant experience, but I'm good on everything else.
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Hey everyone I asked a Q about this poem a litle while back and I think I'm done but to those that answered before I would like to know what they think. and to all advicenators too but is it good at all now? just let me know please. Thanks.
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You laugh at me, You point.
You say "how weird!"
You say "how ugly!"
You say "how stupid!"
I turn the other cheek so you can just laugh and point some more.
I have cried my tears. I have hated myself for you.
There were times when I couldn't see through my tears and somehow I found the strengh to turn the other cheek but still you laughed and pointed more.
So in this poem I want to tell you that the days of your laughing and pointing are no more.
When I see you I laugh and say ""How Pathetic!"".
You have put me through this torment for you own satisfaction but no more.
I have cryed my tears. I have hated myself for you but No More. (link)
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I love it now. Very emotional. The entire last part, starting with "there were times . . ." and going to the end is absolutely lovely.
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Rating: 5
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thank you. I don't think its good but maybe it is, so thanx.
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