I watched people get great advice and really bad advice. I here to just give good advice! I've been told i should do this for aliving but I just enjoy it on my free time for when someone needs help. I get a rush and enjoyment from helping out people, you could say i kinda have a "thing" for it. Ask me for any kinda pf advice and i'll try my very hardest to help you out.(:
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Hi, i'm Meg, i am 13 and LOVE writing. This is a poem i wrote for a loved one,tell me what you think please.
The darkness attacks at the mention of your name
The ache in my heart strikes once again
I remember the times we would sing and dance
Then not saying 'I love you' one last chance
will you think of me wherever you are?
Pillow fights,cuddles,air guitar?
I need you,please come back from our part
Take the pieces and fix my heart.
You went to early we were unprepared
It left us sad,full of sorrow and scared.
He lies here now as cute as a lamb
The grandchild you never met, You'de be proud of him Nan.
RIP Nan. I'll never stop loving you,your the wind beneath my wings. xx (link)
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Yes i loved it all but when you said the line "Pillow fights,cuddles,air guitar?" everything is so peaceful and sweet untill that line it brings fun into it i feel like it should be changed..i see your point for rhyimg with the are before it in the last line that was done..but maybe try to thing on something more peaceful to put there. may try this out since you just ended with asking "will you think of me wherever you are?" put there Even if i'm sitting in a car? or put Even when i'm sitting in a car?....runns more clearly and makes since because the poem had just said will you think of me whereever you are?
I loved the poem though it was great! You can take the advice or not...it would be great anyway..i had just thought it made more since...good luck and great job!(:
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I know I'm not in the right category, but I couldn't find what to put this under... ok.. what is the song called that goes "Love of my life, my soul mate.. you're my best friend" in the begining?? Please someone help! It's driving my CRAZY!!!! (link)
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I've looked it up and i think the song you're thinging about is called "Hope" pretty cute song! :D I hope I helped you!
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