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Posted Wednesday July 21 2004, 9:00 pm
Everythings set
No ones home
Liquid on me like a net
Making this dome
Im not turning back
This worlds just not for me
Im starting to pack
I know you wish I could see
This river makes a maze
Up towards me
Im so afraid of this blaze
It flickers in the dark
I dont want to let it go
On my fingers its leaving a mark
But its ok because no one will know
Its falling
I close my eyes
I hear my mom calling
I realize i dont want to say good-bye
I jump up and run so fast
Flames
They all pass
Im almost to the door
But its to late
I fall to t...
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checking my pulse (poem)
Posted Wednesday July 21 2004, 7:52 pm
ok i dunno if i like this poem i wrote can you guys help me
Checking my pulse:
checking my pulse
trying to see if i'm alive
as i lay here
me sweat making my hair stick to my face
my heart pounding
my stomach spinning
checking my pulse
becuase i just told you
how i feel
i feel as if i've been lifted away
into a world unknown to me
into a world lead by you
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Posted Wednesday July 21 2004, 2:17 pm
hey im new on this thing, will you post me? please?
http://www.advicenators.com/column.php?u=xO_bORn_2_Be_wILd_Xo
thanks =)
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poem # 5
Posted Tuesday July 20 2004, 3:36 pm
yet another poem-
There is a little place, here, inside my head, where everything hides, everything I dread.
There is another place where all funny things hide, all the laughs that I've had stay quietly inside.
There is one last place where my love stays apart from the rest, this little place is my heart and I think I like it best.
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like?
Posted Tuesday July 20 2004, 11:13 am
uh, i just wrote this poem and i wanna see if u think its good.i dont kno wut to name it tho. so here it is:
There's love i miss
A desired kiss
A someone to hold
Their loveletters to unfold
Love i wish to have
But this i can't
To risk my heart i shan't
To take that risk
Is to risk the miss
Of losing something that once was
All because
We fools who love
Will risk beyond and above
To have that chance
To take that fall
All because of love's true call
by:me,taryn collins!
wut do you think?i hope you like it.
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This Poem
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 8:36 pm
I'm not sure i got this poem sounding right; anyone please gimme a hand.
Fallen Hero
I looked up to a figure
I once deemed to be the best.
But as time slipped to the second,
My faith was put to the test.
Me hero was declined
Of his powerful throne,
Shoved to the side
And deprived of all he called his own.
I stood with the disappointed
Who late looked him on,
And surprisingly found myself
Not nearly as drawn.
As I turned my back,
Shaking my head,
He uttered his final words
And the next second he’s dead.
I found myself thinking twice
Of what I had once thought....
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jus a couple more poems
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 3:47 pm
write me about em...
ugahottie321 on AIM and Advicenators
<3 fran
I just can’t handle this anymore
My heart is broken and completely sore
There’s more stress than I can take
I wish this was a dream and I could just wake
I want to get away
Not to stay
This place isn’t for me
Why can’t you see
Nothing goes right
No point in being polite
I just can’t stand it
This just doesn’t fit
Please let me go
So maybe I won’t feel so low
another
It’s so easy to love you
I don’t know why
It’s so easy to think of you
No need to try
I wish I was with you
...
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another poem
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 3:31 pm
another poem yall
I look in the mirror
But what do I see
The person I look at
Isn’t the real me
No one knows
What I want to see
Someone that loves
Some one that hates
Someone who isn’t just the someone
That everyone thinks is me
another
Who is louder our hearts or our minds
When it comes time to decide what do we find
We listen closely but it is hard to tell
Almost as if they are two little bells
But which one masks the other
It is so hard to hear
Why should we even bother
It will only cause a tear
another
I shiver in the heat of the day
I wish I...
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PoEm
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 3:15 pm
hey yall i was jus wondering ... i write alota poems anyways just write me bak on if u like em or not btw im Ugahottie321 both on AIM and on Advicenators so talk to me sum timme!
<3 fran
Im scared of getting to deep in
Im scared of getting hurt again
Im scared of the summer morning
Im scared of the autumn rain
Im scared of seeing the sunrise
Although more so to see it set
Im scared of being myself
But even worse of trying to be someone else
Im scared of not being liked
To an even greater extent im scared to be loved
Im scared to reach out
Even more to stay within
Im scared of failure
And of not doing my best
But mo...
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I wrote...........
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 2:11 pm
I wrote a song and i think its pretty good. Im a pretty good singer and I could sing it, but how?
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poem # 4
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 2:10 pm
another 1-
The day will come when you must choose, will you gain or will you lose.
Tell them now, choose with care, the one you love might not always be there.
So tell them now, dont leave it to fate, tell them now before its too late.........
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poem # 3
Posted Monday July 19 2004, 2:08 pm
heres another poem:
When you lose something special, no matter what the pain, you must look inside yourself and see what others gain.
When you lose someone that you love, you must set them free, if they slip through your fingers, then it wasnt meant to be.
Your day will come and your light will shine through, always remember, someone loves you.
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Posted Sunday July 18 2004, 4:58 pm
ive been criticizing other peoples poems and i would like to know what people think of some of my work...
The knife
Seductively strokes your arm
The sharp pain
The tiny droplet
Nothing
The blade
Drawn down your forehead
The an abrupt bliss
A bloody tear
Nothing
The dagger
Slitting your wrist
A delightful innervation
The extravagant red
Nothing
The switchblade
Cold at your throat
Lack of breath
A graceful fountain
Nothing
The scythe
Ripped down your back
The first true pain
Death’s eyes are beautiful
You find no God
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hows this
Posted Friday July 16 2004, 3:18 pm
ok if your a lord of the rings fan you might get this but you might anyway.
into the south
int othe south we go
through danger we do not know
we'll give it our best
to finish our quest
with only a sword and bow
to mordor we must fly
where darkness fills the sky
throught dark shadows and mirk meadows
the end of all comes nigh
--- ok i know thats not that good but how do yall like it?---
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another poem......
Posted Friday July 16 2004, 1:59 pm
hey im the one who wrote the poem about the girl who ran away, heres another one:
Your eyes are the color of the sky,after days of rain, hollow and empty, just to cover up the pain.
I want to scream and I want to know, what terrible thing has made you so.....
You hide inside as you let your body take the blame, youre to weak to handle all the shame.
Maybe all could be better , all of this could be through, if youd take the time to listen when I say that I love you.
how was it?
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Her Dotted Line
Posted Thursday July 15 2004, 10:25 pm
Sharpie marker- her favorite color black
Placing it on her wrist
She drew a dotted line
And a heart for good measure
The empty heart that stained her skin
Looked vacant next to the scattered stripe
She didn’t have a knife..
So the razor blade would suffice
And on the dotted line she sliced
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good poem ???
Posted Wednesday July 14 2004, 10:16 pm
today is one of those days where i feel like crying
Baby i know ur not trying
but the sadness really hurts
when i guess ur somewhere else
*Baby come back home*
i will rate
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Posted Tuesday July 13 2004, 11:29 am
ok this is to: xxhotsexycutiexx how did u get ur back round liek that! its cute!
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how.....
Posted Monday July 12 2004, 12:38 pm
I have written a few short stories and I think they are pretty good<not bragging> and I think they could be full stories if I had more detail. Do you think I could use them as playwrites?
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poem
Posted Monday July 12 2004, 9:19 am
is this a good poem:
Surrounded by friends, but she has none of her own, shes in a crowded room, but feels so alone.
Late one night she was lying in her bed, tear drops falling, thoughts running through her head.
Her hopes and dreams and she cried until she could no more.
Home she could no longer stay, so she ran far away, she left her quiet home that night, she went down the street and out of sight.
She didnt see the car until it was too late. she felt all emotions at once. Pain. Love. Hate.
Now shes somewhere where everyone cares and the streets are paved with gold. She looks down from heaven, shining her light upon the young and old.
So if y...
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