Hi! I live in Chino Hills, California and I came to this site to see if I can help anyone who needs it. I am 15 years old and am known in my group of friends as the "voice of reason" :)
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Ok so i already posted this once but i didnt get as much feedback as i wanted. Please read this and tell me what you think. I had to write it for english it is loves/loses. Thanks in advance!
I love you now,
I lost you yet,
I will always be here.
Don’t you fret
I know it hurts
But life goes on
I will try not to listen
To those sappy love songs,
Cause when I do,
I think of you
And what we used to be,
I just wish you would see
I gave you everything,
Yet you pushed me away,
I promise I will miss you,
Every single day
Me and you,
We can find a way,
And maybe…just maybe
We can be together someday.
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wow! you are a really talented writter! this is a great poem! I think to make it flow better, you should try this (you dont have to it is just my own personal opinion)
in the first phrase try this:
I love you now
I lost you yet
I'll always be here
Don't forget
and in the third phrase, try this:
'cause when i do
I think of you,
what we used to be
I just wish you could see
In the forth phrase try this:
I gave you everything,
you pushed me away,
I promise I'll miss you,
every single day
I know it's alot but its just my imput, you dont have to take it
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